I couldn't help but notice the amount of time between the release of the first episode and this episode... I believe there is a 15 day difference between them. It's great that you can release a new video within that small space of time, but it seems WAY too similar to the previous video.
The main issue here is the jokes and the overall originality of the flash. The jokes were okay, I guess, I chuckled at a few, some were just not funny, more effort need to be put into the jokes alongside adding something completely new which has never been done before...
And to do this you need to put more time into it:- More time into the jokes, more time into thinking about what you are going to do in the next episode, more time into everything. I hate to break it to you, a lone person (I'm assuming there is just one of you, excluding voice actors) making a full, fluid animation with bits of music in, while thinking up the jokes, in 15 days... Difficult task, particularly when you are uploading it to the net for commercial reasons, because it typically needs to be of the very best quality in order to become a massive success. (Did I go a bit over the top there...?)
Here's what you did good. The animation was very good, along with the voice acting, and the transactions were less annoying and less repetitive than last time, you also used different colours in each sketch rather than using the same very bold blue lines, so it's that little bit nicer on the eyes to watch.
+ Animation is fluid
+ Transactions aren't annoying any more
+ Voice acting is still brilliant
- Jokes weren't bad, but REALLY need to be improved on.
- Too much like the previous episode
- Not enough time spent on it.
That's all it really needs, more time for each episode, and this could very well be the next ASDF, but try not to associate yourself with ASDF, bad idea... really bad idea.
I hope you keep up the good work, you've got something going here. Improve it and all will be awesome.
I'm going to do "something else" now and give you a...
Review: 3.5 stars
Vote: 3 Picos
(P.S. I used that pun last time... Man I love that pun)
(P.S.S I noticed the lack of youtube subscription advertisements for your channel, glad you did, makes the flash seem more professional rather than have you seemingly poking us with a stick that says "subscribe to us" on it.)
Most people are going to say straight away that this is too much like ASDF, I myself, don't really care, this flash doesn't seem to be purposely stealing ideas, I see it more as inspiration myself. Now if you completely ripped off ASDF by making the lines drawn in black, with no background music and you went a bit more random with your jokes, then there would be more of a problem. (ASDF fanboys, please don't instantly go and press the useless review button, I'm just stating my opinion)
The jokes in this flash were fairly funny, I got all of them but none never made me burst out into uncontrollable laughter; just small belly laughs.
The transactions made the video more repetitive than it actually was, the exact same animation and guitar riff is all it took to make it so; you could simply mix it up each time, you could use a slightly different guitar riff, a slightly different animation, or even use a different colour for each sketch.
To end on the positive, the box-headed people were drawn and animated well, and the voice-acting was brilliant and added to what little chuckles I had while watching.
+ Drawn and animated well
+ Voice acting was brilliant
- Not that funny (But funnier than other things I've seen)
- Transactions were repetitive
This video is ok, definitely watchable; I wouldn't mind seeing where you take this next (I would recommend that you try to separate yourself from ASDF, I myself don't care, but A LOT of people are going to keep bringing it up every time you submit a video for this series if you keep this exact style)
(p.s. That pun... was... unexpected..!)
Well that's a first...
Before I say anything else. I have not watched a tutorial video more than once, apart from this one; and I believe this is the first flash tutorial (Or any tutorial ever (That I've seen)) ever to actually teach though song. This is clearly not a bad thing, because few tutorials are entertaining as well as... well... a tutorial!
I even found it funny in places. I can safely say I've never laughed while watching a tutorial before until now.
If you haven't got it already, what I'm trying to say is that this flash is very creative, original and turned out really well.
As mentioned in the author comments, the animation IS "very limited", but as far as I can see, that is the only flaw.
Oh yeah, did I forget to mention that the line "lock that, lock that, lock that layer, uh, uh, uh" is now stuck in my head (or something to that effect). I'm not simply quoting for the sake of quoting, that line IS stuck in my head!
Good job, I look forward to seeing more from you in the future.
vote: 5 / 5
Review: 9 / 10
That is the funniest thing I've seen since, well... Hardon potter, but I watched this twice as much, and there are two parts in this flash that I am STILL fully ROFL'ing at even though I've probably watched this 50 times :D
I don't think there is anything else to be said other than,
"Oney. Keep rocking NG! :D"
or am I being a bit too... uh... I don't know. Good job anyway! :)
vote: 5 / 5
Review: 10 / 10
(P.S. For the record I have not watched a single episode or played any games based on dragonball z)
LOLZ to be had... XD
To tell you the absolute truth, I haven't LOL'D that hard for quite a while - Probably because the vid made zero sense whatsoever and it involved finding bananas on the moon... Random yelling and the word MOOOOOONNNAAAAHHHH!!! included.
Other than that the flash was pretty average. The animation and art were of an OK quality but did fit along nicely with the randomness of the flash.
So... Yeah... I'm gonna watch that again and geef you a...
review 7 / 10
vote 4 / 5
You might want to rethink that idea of yours
The problem here is that it isn't a FLASH movie.
Sure, you might have made it on the flash software, but as the person below me said, it's "just pictures and soundclips". and the worst part of it is, none of it was created by you. And I'll think you'll find quite a few of the newground users hate both of those things.
The best thing you can do on this website is make something original (even if it is making fun of something else). Put your own content in it. You'll find that it will be scored higher. and if you've got nothing else to do, check out my flashes, yes they are crap, maybe worse than yours, but they contain my own stuff and (sorry to say) scored higher than yours.
That is as much I can help you without getting rude or anything like that. what I just said was only a suggestion. so don't take it too seriously, but i'm sure if you learned one thing from my review your new submission will be great! :)
Good luck for next time.
I appreciate what your trying to say but this was just a 1 minute joke pretty much. It seemed like a lot of your advice is about getting a high voting and review score. If you would like to see some of my serious work, play "Final Fantasy 7 Trivia 2" That has a score of 3.3/5 and review score of 7.5/10.
I would love to know what you think of it so if you let me a review I would like to know what you think of something that I actually worked hard on.
Thanks you very much for taking the time to write me a review!
PS- does this really deserve a 0/10? I mean even if it was a colored background that said "happy birthday" that would at least be a 1/10. 0 means its the worst thing ever made, i guess thats all im trying to say lol
I agree with the front page... WTF!
You don't see something like this every day.
Great work. excellent animating, well looped, best beat-boxing i've ever herad.
I wish to see more rondom stuff to make me LOL soon, pure awesomeness. :)
The animation was awesome!
The song was awesome!
I've watched this... about... over 10 times! (...And counting!)
ALL of your stuff is great, keep it up... (But of course you will! :P)
LOVE the song! LOVE the graphics..! LOVE the robot pirate idea!
Keep it up... Please!
Seemed a bit short, but the animation was good.
Yeah I agree that it was a bit short. The original idea I had was about 10 seconds long, and I ended up extending it into a "full" animation. But now I have ideas for two more parts to wrap the series up! Thanks for the comment!
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